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owlectomyI figured how to fix the story, or at least, I think I did.
The problem here was that I'm a novel-writer by instinct: short stories generally end in one of those perfect moments of revelation, where in novels you generally have to tie up all the loose ends. So I got my "perfect moment of revelation," or my attempt at it--and then I tried to tie up the loose ends. Which made for a rather anticlimactic ending. I think my second try is better, but I'll have to get some distance from it to be sure.
The problem here was that I'm a novel-writer by instinct: short stories generally end in one of those perfect moments of revelation, where in novels you generally have to tie up all the loose ends. So I got my "perfect moment of revelation," or my attempt at it--and then I tried to tie up the loose ends. Which made for a rather anticlimactic ending. I think my second try is better, but I'll have to get some distance from it to be sure.